Question: Is this well written?

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Answer #1:

Junior high school. The structure is a bit too jumpy and inconsistent, and wildly swings from overly dry and factual to almost side-show chatty and conversational.

To say that the Obama girls "did absolutely nothing," is condescending and pretentious, as you do not know what goals the family set for the girls ~clean their room, practice music or dance, or behave properly when in public, or ???...
"Only novels and sequels could hold all that 2009 had to offer." Pure claptrap. Anyone who has read any history could easily pick years that were FAR more momentous. 1963. 1968, 1945, 2001...ANY year in history has "its ups (NO apostrophe!) and downs" (Plurals are NOT possessive or contractions!!!).

The last sentence, "You can't argue with that, now, can you?" Is a poor challenge, since yes, many people COULD very easily argue with that, and win...

Answer #2:

I think it's well written for a junior high student.





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